Medical Personal Statement let me down even after I have 3 A's. Can you have a read and make suggestions?

Medicine is an ever growing, ever changing field. Doctors and researchers can spend their whole lives trying to find a cure for a disease only to realise that when they have, a new disease takes its place and hence the cycle begins again. This is just one of the many reasons why I believe that medicine is such a unique and distinctive field, because there is no beginning, no end and therefore you never stop learning.

In order to gain a realistic insight into the life of a doctor I organised some work experience within a hospital. I worked with different people including surgeons and juniordoctors. I went on ward rounds, sat in an outpatient clinic, and observed live surgery. From

all these different angles of medicine I understand that in order to enter such a diverse field you need to be adaptable and flexible in order to meet the demands of such a hectic career. Teamwork was essential throughout the whole week and was a major factor for all the

medical staff. When having a conversation with the surgeon I was amazed when he mentioned the prospect of having surgery without making incisions. This illustrates the advancement of

medicine; we have gone from making large incisions to keyhole surgery and now to having no incisions.



Attending a medical conference at **** University allowed me to enhance my knowledge on what life as a medical student entailed. One to one conversations with doctors, and medical students demonstrated the reality of a career in medicine. From this experience I appreciate that you cannot simply become a doctor and help people. An immense amount of dedication and

perseverance is required to reach this stage, however I believe that I have the motivation required to become a useful member of the medical profession.

I am a regular volunteer at both the Deaf %26amp; Blind Society and *** Hospice. I am often placed in charge of organising activities for the Society. By working here I realised that it is the little things that really make the difference in the patients' lives, and also shows me

the reality of the patients and their families who have to cope with a loved one having a terminal illness. Having to cope in high pressure situations such as these has allowed me to realise the stresses and strains that come with being a doctor. From both these experiences I

understand how vital empathy %26amp; a sense of humour is when it comes to dealing with the patient and trying to make the best out of the bleakest situation.



My communication and public speaking skills have been demonstrated by being an active member of the debating team. The rebuttals during the debates have definitely enhanced my ability to

be able to think on the spot. Having to work with the team has improved my listening skills greatly, which is beneficial as being a doctor requires listening to the patients express

their views and explain their symptoms.



Mentoring younger children in science has developed my organisation and planning skills. Having to be prepared every week with a new presentation or activity allowed me to think ahead

and also increased my creativity skills, as I had to prepare something that my mentee would find informative but also exciting.

I'm an active member of the local gym, which helps me to unwind. I am currently taking cooking classes, which I also enjoy. Balancing many different activities has developed my time management skills and given me one of the most essential tools for a career as challenging as medicine.



I understand that doctors are only human and can only help their patients to a limit; however

I would be privileged to enter such an exceptional field and be part of this unique team.

Although a career in medicine requires 100% concentration, I believe I am a determined,enthusiastic individual who rises up to challenge and has the skills that are vital to manage such a demanding course as medicine.Medical Personal Statement let me down even after I have 3 A's. Can you have a read and make suggestions?
If I understand correctly, you have just earned or will soon earn your bachelor's degree and are applying to medical school.



In this case, the problem with your essay is that it reads like an essay of a student applying for undergraduate school. You have mentioned nothing about the scientific research that you should have done in college. If fact, you have not mentioned anything about your four years in college.



If you are in high school and are applying to undergraduate school, your essay concept would be OK if you mentioned specifically that you want to study pre-med, so long as you cut down the discussion of medical preparation to give you space to write specifically about how the experiences you have had have changed you for the better and how you anticipate that undergraduate school will enable to continue on this path.



If you are in a country where you go directly to medical school after high school, your essay is a good first draft and needs lots of refinement.



In any case, you need to clean up the grammar and syntax as well as the conclusion.



Good luck.
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Read your statement. You have a few punctuation errors and places where commas should be but aren't.



Also, this sounds too much like an undergrad paper and not enough like a grad student. I think you also focused on you too much. This is for med school but where's the references to med school? You talk about science and creativity and communication. After your paragraph about attending medical conferences the focus on med school seems to all but disappear.



Ask yourself if they really have to know about your public speaking skills and mentoring of little kids. I think you should take those out because it seems to derail your paper.



Maybe talk of what its like to be a doctor and the impact you witnessed that they have on the lives of the patient and the families you volunteered with. Why thats important.Medical Personal Statement let me down even after I have 3 A's. Can you have a read and make suggestions?
firstly, dont put your personal statement on a site like this. people might take things from it and then it wont be personal at all. so remove this when you can.



you spend most of the statement telling the admission tutor things they already know...they know its an ever changing growing field and they dont want you to reiterate it to them. they want to know about YOU and your reasons not an insight into the subject theyre already teaching.
You need to look at your grammar and punctuation and also you need to relate the subjects you studied as you have not said anything about that i.e. why did you choose Maths? how does this relate to Medicine.